Your writing has a lot of onomatopoeia and description. I like your simile of the 50 drums.You may need to work on your fullstops and commas, otherwise, we'll be out of breath by the second slide!! :)By einsteinshania and einsteinjoanna
Your writing has a lot of onomatopoeia and description. I like your simile of the 50 drums.
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By einsteinshania and einsteinjoanna